I have some mixed feelings about this set. I'm going to talk through the entire routine from vardiyaan to lighting cues, etc.
You cant miss the beginning. It seemed like some of the dancers werent ready for it, but regardless, not hitting the first beat of the routine on point is a serious bummer for me.
In your shikke segment, i dont see the need for strobes on the drop, it actually made it seem like you were hiding something during the drop.
Kato segment - keep your elbows up at all times, it makes form look weak.
Khunde gimmick has been done, just in a different way -> if your gonna do a gimmick, be 100% its gonna hit!
phumaniya segment - form on phumaniya and bedi didnt seem especially developed, i recommend watching some other teams videos.
Jhummar - my favorite moment of any routine (for the most part), and this routine as well. However...form was off (ill talk about that at the end)
Mirza - make sure everyone hits that first beat together again
***Also at this point in the routine paags were an issue with flopping, its very distracting
During jugni, the guy in pink, do not let your chaadar slip up on your leg like that! Many judges will dock points for that
Gimmick of bringing out more dancers -> its been done before, so it didnt have the effect that it used to (just a personal opinion)
So overall dancing critiques, saaps form was strong, but after that the upper body form suffered throughout the entire routine. Postures were weak, arms were inconsistent between dancers, etc. It will benefit everyone on your team to work on dancing with a large posture (think about sticking your chest out, and as mentioned earlier lift your chin up), shoulders need to be bouncing more.
One thing I always tell my dancers is to dance between the beats. This means to actively thing about the time between the beats and works on taking up all the time between beats with your dancing. This always means that the transition from one move to another or even from one beat to the second beat is crucially important. Once this is standardized between all your dancers, youll see drastic improvements!
Any time you have triple steps/taps like during jaddu sangha/morchal, everyones knees need to get up, its the weakest footwork for your team so far.
For punjab and dhamaal footwork, make sure the knee is getting up high as well
When doing step down/taps footwork, dont let your upper body sway side to side
Jhummar is a whole different story, make sure when dancing jhummar that you dont rush the beats! Its a slow graceful segment, but dancing it rushed ruins the effect of it all. Also most important part of jhummar is having a nice big posture, this dramatically increases your stage presence! Like i mentioned earlier, work on dancing between the beats, standardize everything from how/when you lift your leg, to how your hand will move from one spot to another.
Overall, once form is standardized, posture is fixed, footwork is improved, energy and cleanliness are improved upon, this team will be fire! Keep at it, and consciously work to fix these things at practice!
As scaplash said, the formations did seem stagnant, nowadays people want cool intricate formations, this doesnt mean moving from one shape to another, but it means to move to a formation, and do something really unique within that formation. Make sure each formation serves a purpose, wether it is building up to a drop or hitting a gimmick or whatever.
Lastly, I saw some moves in choreo that i personally wouldnt use to move around the stage. For example, jumps or kichan (sp?) are not great moves to be using to move around stage, they are moves that just look better being wrecked in spot. other moves like sways are meant for moving around stage!
P.S. Manreet told me this was your first comp, I'm impressed with that! Keep on working hard and you'll be great in no time. Don't fall under the trap that most collegiate teams do nowadays, don't just teach the set to the dancers, teach the actual dance (form, posture, and style) first, then work on the set. Youll be amazed at how clean and powerful the set will look then!
Good luck in the future and feel free to message me with any questions about anything!
